Reflections of Celestial Grandeur

Sequestered by an ancient Oak,
harmonious night's silent solitude.
Tranquil, darkened, cerulean water,
motionless, breathless… a piercing silence.


Reflections of celestial grandeur,
slate speckled, silvern ivory.
Luminously sublime, unwavering,
intensely breathtaking.


Nature's spirits reposing,
depleted from daylight endeavors.
Restoring their lusty efficacy,
benefiting vagabond souls.


Silence… wondrous music of plainsong,
comforting, benevolent, resounding.
Sumptuous beauty above mirrored below
peaceful… completely quenching solace.


Authors Note; I did this poem for submission to The Artist Challenge # 14 – Moon River. It will be posted with the gallery of amazing artwork depicting different artist concept of the theme Moon River. Artist Challenge These are some unbelievably talented artists, and the gallery is well worth your time to visit. So go on over there, and check out the wonders to been seen. I also wrote another article on Mountain Dreamer to go along with and help promote the challenge. If you are in the mood for some more nature writing, swing on over and tell me what you think.

34 comments:

Bobbi said...

Beautiful poem!
"Reflections of celestial grandeur..."
I love this line!

Eric S. said...

Thank You Bobbi. I had a lot of fun with this one. The first version flew out in about fifteen minutes, then came the edit! I'm so particular about things, LOL.

Eric S. said...

Thank You Bobbi. I had a lot of fun with this one. The first version flew out in about fifteen minutes, then came the edit! I'm so particular about things, LOL. :-D

cheryl said...

Wow, Eric ! This is so powerful. I know how the moon affects us for I'm a skywatcher from way back. Can't wait for the Perseids meteor shower in a week. Congratulations with the Artist Challenge :)

Sonya Meglaurel said...

Absolutely wonderful image. It's like you pulled it from my mind on a grander scale! Maybe it s that am so nearsighted these days that could only muster a little of the full image---or that you dream on a higher level than I! at any rate so good to have you back youngun

Eric S. said...

Hi Cheryl, Thanks. You know the moon has such a unique effect on me. Especially a full moon, not the wild and crazy effect of legends, but a calming one. Views of the celestial formations and wonders, on a clear night, especially out in the country well away from the city lights is a favorite pass time . 8-)

Eric S. said...

Thank you Sonya, My daydreams are pretty vivid and grandiose. The funny thing is that many of my dreams at night, I can never remember. I know they are just as wondrous, and would love to try and capture some of them.

It's good to be back, so refreshing 8-)

shadow said...

i thoroughly enjoyed your poem, the images perfect!

Eric S. said...

Thank you Shadow, I'm glad you liked it. ;)

Kel said...

Nice to see you testing yourself with poetry again. I like best the final line. A moonlit walk has quenched many a burning time for me, and cooled/soothed many a desperate thirst.

AngelBaby said...

Wow, beautiful poem. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing 8-)

Love and Blessings,
AngelBaby

jodapoet said...

That poems fits the photo like pieces to a puzzle. The style and wording are perfectly blended. All I can really say is awesome!

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Eric S. said...

Thanks AngelBaby, I had a lot of fun with this challenge, and it sparked so much inspiration for me. I've been writing Moon posts for a coulpe of days now, LOL.

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Eric S. said...

Hey Kel, This wasn't even a tough one for me. It seemed to flow out right along the theme line. Of course I have many a memory from back home about those moonlit nights that helped allot. 8-)

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Eric S. said...

Thank you so much JodaPoet, I'm glad you liked it. When I was searching for pictures to match the poem, I spent hours browsing through CoolIris. This one just jumped out at after about an hour and a half.

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lilly said...

Wow Eric you never cease to amaze me. That was beautiful. your break clearly did you good - fantastic. Glad you are back though.

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Eric S. said...

Thanks Lilly. It's sure nice to be back. Helps to have the two computers now, kind of keeps the peace, LOL.

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Robin Easton said...

Wow Eric!! I am speechless from reading this. It's as if you wrote how I feel when I am with Nature. I could never write something this beautiful with so few words. It took me a whole book. You are amazing and your relationship with Nature is profound. I am very moved reading your poem. Very impressed and touched.

I had tears in my eyes reading this: "Natures spirits reposing, depleted from daylight tribulations. Restoring their lusty efficacy, benefiting a simple soul such as I."

I felt your humbleness in relationship to Nature. This is something that I too experience. Bless you for sharing such beauty. Robin



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Eric S. said...

Wow, thank you Robin. The response I'm getting from this poem is great. I love to sit in my office and let my mind drift to more serene places Like that I wrote about. It's my way of getting out of this wild city when I have no other means or time. All of my most soulful moments in life have been out in nature. One can't help it with all that beauty around them.

I love that picture of the hand shadow through the leaf.

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Eric S. said...

Robin, you might like the post I did on my other site http://mountaindaydreamer.blogspot.com it's dealing with the same type of moon. By the way, I have a quote from you on that site also. 8-)

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Kim said...

Words to stir the soul. I love the moon (light reflection, you know) and trees are amazing.

Eric, I don't know how you find the time to make all of these connections! It seems I can hardly make online connections a couple of times a week. When I add that to family, there seems to be no time left for serious studio work! I am truly amazed!

Thank you so much for continuing to visit my blog. I am truly honored with your powerful words there.

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Eric S. said...

Thank you Kim, and as for visiting your blog, believe me it's my pleasure.

There are times when I run out of energy, or hours in the day for all the blog hopping I do. Sometimes I can only read the posts and don't have the time to post comments. I do have to say though, I have so much fun "visiting" with everyone on-line, it's hard to explain. It's funny, because I'm not an overly social person in real life, LOL. ;)

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Jena Isle said...

It's so beautiful Eric. You aplty expressed into words what most of us feel in that particular scene.

The poem fits the picture perfectly and vice-versa.
The imagery is vivid and hauntingly superb. I love these lines:

"Silence… wondrous music of new tone,
comforting, benevolent, resounding.
Sumptuous beauty above, mirrored below,
peaceful… completely quenching solace."

The mood you were in was so tangible and real, I could almost feel it myself.

Bravo!
:)

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Barbara said...

You paint a picture far more beautiful than any that could be photographed.

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Maggie`s Mind said...

Wow. Very nicely done!

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Eric S. said...

Thank you so much Jena. A clear night with full moon, is one of my favorite times. A person can't help but be moved by such beauty.

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Eric S. said...

Wow, thank you so much for the kind words Barbara. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Eric S. said...

Thanks Maggie, I take it your home Internet is hooked up now. I'll swing by your site, and see how things in Japan are going.

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mike said...

I enjoyed this side of you, Eric. You're a poet...and you do know it.

peace,
mike
livelife365

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Eric S. said...

Thanks Mike, however I would never claim to be a poet. I'm just trying to bluff my way around that, LOL. 8-)

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Kel said...

Oh boy, "wasn't even a tough one for me . . . "? Tsk tsk tsk My Clark-burdened memory sees an ocean of black board waiting the powdery scritch of disciplined-forced chalk; and the skin on my back, buttocks, and thighs tightens with the memory of the sting of a green branch switch.

In an attempt to craft the nightmares from of the Clark years into something constructive, I'm rolling up my sleeves here . . . .

Quatrain 1, Line #1: I like that the "o" in Oak is capitalized, I have many a tree friend that I would honor, as well, with title/name.
Line #2: As the silent solitude belongs to night, you're missing an apostrophe
Line #3: Try a comma between tranquil and darkened--it's grammatically more correct, and the rhythm benefits--and I think taking the comma away from 'water' serves both line 3 and line 4.
Line #4: Nice (and I mean that in the way my X-Gen step-daughter uses the word--an expression of rich appreciation and satisfaction in the author's/artist's/fellow's skill)!

Quatrain 2, line #1: [Yawn] . . . too easy
Line #2: 'argentious' is pretentious--and does not serve the line in tone nor rhythm. . . my vote would be for "silvery." It slides sensuously off the tongue with the other "Ss" in the line.
Line #3: eh . . . okay
Line #4: 'breathtaking ' I'm okay with . . . 'preeminently,' I'm not so sure.

Quatrain 3, Line 1: Very clean, evocative . . . excellent
Line #2: Scrap "tribulations", the rest works . . . ."strivings?" "reaching?" I don't know, but tribulations is too negative I think. Something to evoke healthy/proper work would be more in keeping with the generally upbeat tone of the poem.
Line #3. I grinned at reading "lusty effacacy," that's a great combination
Line #4: Oh please . . . "a simple soul such as I?" Gaheesh, gaghk, gaghk! Obsequiousness does not suit thee O'brother mine, as thou art far from a "simple" soul. It's clear what you're reaching for in that line, but trust me on this one (if on no other). . . that line needs a firm eraser applied to it.

The fourth quatrain sounds the cleanest to my ear and heart. I might only suggest removing the commas at "above" and "below," to smooth the rhythm through to the exhale.

Hugs, love, and pride in your accomplishments everlasting,

The Elder Sis

Eric S. said...

Obsequiousness? I do see what you mean, wasn't what I was going for, but you know. I was thinking more along the line of appreciator of gifts not "seen" more "felt". Just didn't quite know how to go about that.

So I made a few changes, let me what you think. :-P ;)

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Kel said...

Hmmm . . . the "y" in slivery is a bit of an issue there isn't it? Silver'd, silvering?

Anyway, what do YOU think? There are poets out there who never stop fiddling with their poems, even after they've been published (e.g. W.B. Yeats).

And, okay, suggesting the tone border on the obsequious was not really apt . . . but you probably caught my drift, eh?

Would removing "exceptionally" from Q2L4 leave the quatrain with too abrupt an ending?

On Q3L4: The is the only line with a "personalized" voice . . . would trading the Nature spirits "waiting vagabond day," for the assertion of a personal presence push too much distance into the poem?

Taking a second look at that quatrain caused me to realize that there is either a missing apostrophe in "Natures" or the "s" needs to be removed. Do the spirits belong to Nature? Or are they nature spirits?

I do like this poem, I just couldn't help tweaking your nose just a bit. After all, what are siblings for if not to keep each other grounded ?!?


;)

Eric S. said...

Oh that's quite all right. I had tweaked and twitched this poem 20 times already. Each time I read it I see something I want to change, or something I like. The poor challenge, I sent probably them 5 revisions. It's fun anyway, and the initial poem came through in a matter of about ten minutes., so revisions are to be expected.

Now then, as far as removing the personalization, I can't quite bring myself to do that completely. It feels like taking my experience out of it. I can however generalize it, making more of a possibility it's any wandering soul, soul being the human entity, but I do like the word vagabond.

I think the spirits belong to nature, so I'll throw an apostrophe in there. I seem to think of nature along the lines of Jean M Auel in Valley of the Horse. Nature is all powerful, and has many servile spirits, I don't know if servile is the right word, but you get my drift.
8-)

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